Learning Outcome 1
Through the semester I have made changes to the way I revise my own papers, and an example of this is through my first writing project. The introduction of your paper should be long enough to introduce your paper properly, but short enough that you don’t explain too much and leak into your first point. Compared to my first draft, my introduction in my final draft is shortened with less detail, but it still introduces the background to my paper. Another global scale revision is quoting. On page two of my first draft, I don’t completely explain what my father is saying and how it relates to my thesis. On page two of my final draft, I explain what my father is saying in more detail. I take an extra sentence or two before connecting my father’s point to the point of Lizzie Widdicombe. This shows that I take more time to fully explain one viewpoint and meaning behind a quote before I move on to the next viewpoint or topic in my paper. My paragraph structure changes between the final and initial drafts. On page three of both drafts, I switch the way I word I switch from directly talking about family connection and food (initial draft), to talking about it in an indirect way in my final draft. I discuss food and family by carrying on the flow and thought process from the paragraph before instead of abruptly talking about the relation of family to food. This shows that I can continue the flow of the reading while explaining the point of that passage.
