Learning Outcome 4

My development in peer reviewing is shown in my peers work on project one. Coming into this semester my review skills were mainly focused around local revisions and major global issues like the thesis not making sense or the introduction/body/conclusion not being long enough. Now I start to focus mainly on the idea or topic that the person is trying to use as an example or reference. In peer paper 2 this is shown on page two where I ask about the connection between cigarettes and their thesis. I focused on the connection of the example rather than referencing the sentence structure or number of misspelled words. This is also shown in peer review 1 on page 2, where I mention that the writer should relate their point back to their thesis. Whenever a point is being made it has to, in some way, be reinforcing your thesis. That’s why I added that the writer should reference the point back to their thesis so the example is related and not a random example in their paper.  This is showing global revisions early in the process.

On a local point, I bring up sentence and paragraph flow, making sure paragraphs transition properly into the next and sentences read smoothly. In peer review 1 page 3, it seems that the writer’s sentences and wording are too crude or don’t read smoothly which is a local error. In peer paper 2 on page 3, the writer finishes the paragraph without mentioning or bringing up the thought or paragraph. These are some local revisions that I make late in the revision process.